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Approved Rennyn Application [Approved - Dinomono]
Started by Sofie2903

OOC

Minecraft Username: Sofie2903

Are you at least 18 years old?: Yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): Yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: a freind

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: 

  1. Sparkles2676



(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

i dont have much of interduction but hi name is Sofie and im 20 years old im a builder in my freetime aswell as an rp'er clearly- cant wait to meet everyone! :D

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)? (250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)

*Rennyn paused his thoughts, looked over to the elderly lady and smiled slightly nervous* "What? oh hey what your first time here or- you know what nevermind.. why I am here?" *He looked around and decided to sit down thinking back to why he came there to get away from the place he grew up in, yet never felt was home* "Well.. i came from the Ashlands, its alot more barren than here i have to say- all the forest flowers and grass its.. refreshing. I did travel for quite a bit so I could get away from home, though I guess it was worth it for how lively it looks down here. It.. smells nice." *He leaned forward looking eye to eye with the old woman. No one would know he was part Fey-Touched if his eyes were not a dead giveaway, all of the other features hidden under his clothes and gloves. He smiled, his ears flickering as something came to mind and he reached up to touch them* "Though.. to get away was not the only reason i left.. i'm not actually a full blooded Fey Touched, if you cant tell by the ears... im half Arsa Sidhe and.. thought maybe.. just a chance if i left i could find my father too. He was a full blooded elf yet i don't know how much i look like him to even be able to find him." *The old woman then asked* "Do you know if his hair is the same color at least? Would be easy to spot in a crowd if that is the case." *He shook his head* "I do not know. I think not, because I was told that my hair was as fiery as the spirit of the fire dragon's own flames. So my family thinks I was blessed by the dragon. And uh- The dragon was an ancient being that is still important to the people of the Ashlands, because it was a guardian and friend to the Fireborne long ago. Which makes the blessing nice, but, weird. Put a lot of pressure."

Character Name: Rennyn Iilnan

Character Race: Half Arsa Sidhe / Half Fey Touched

Character Age: 22

 Brief Physical Description: Rennyn stands at 200 CM tall with fiery red hair, sun-yellow eyes, and long pointed ears. almost allways covers himself up to hide majority of his other half as Fey Touched, with charred looking fingertips and red scales on his arms.

Image of Skin and Figura Model:

Hello! I'm Dinomono and I'll be reviewing your application, so far it's looking good, but there's a few things keeping me from approving it just yet:

Firstly, for Rennyn's physical appearance: 

No one would know he was part Fey-Touched if his eyes were not a dead giveaway, all of the other features hidden under his clothes and gloves. the old woman decided to ask about his bright red hair, unusual for people of arsa heritage. "so whats the story behind that uniqe hair of yours?"

Fey-Touched are actually quite commonly ginger-haired, it's odd for elves to be so.

.. i'm not actually a full blooded Fey Touched, if you cant tell by the ears... im half Arsa Sidhe and..

And this tells me the implication is the old woman assumes he's a Fey-Touched, not an elf. Further, the skin provided will need the eyes changed slightly to show the Fey-Touched heritage. As you can see in the Compendium for them, the entire eye remains a solid colour, in contrast to other races' that follow the normal sclera/iris/pupil distinction of IRL eyes.

Second, whitelists require at least two in-depth references to the setting's lore. I count Rennyn's reminiscing about the Ashlands and the harsh environment as one, and the Spirit of the Fire Dragon is mentioned, but I don't feel is elaborated on enough to count as in-depth- of course, you can reference anything from the compendium and it can count, I'm only referencing the Fable since it's already present in the app.

Last, I'd like you to generally comb over the grammar of the text as there are mistakes present in the IC response and appearance sections, once changes have been made please respond to the thread so I'm notified and can continue reviewing!

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- Signed by Moogy

Hello Dinomono!

Edited the lore and appearence a bit for it to hopefully make more sense and adding what may be missing fixed the eyes aswell though i do wanna say i am english speaking as a first languege it is only my second but i hope its good enough this time

- Welcome! -

Your whitelist application is approved. The server runs on 1.20.4 and you can connect using the IP: mc.avalore.net.

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- Signed by Moogy