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Denied Marbledolleye Application [Denied - Bliinx]
Started by Marbledolleye

OOC

Minecraft Username:  marbledolleye

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): ye

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: friend

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: fryzbee

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): () __ ()
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In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)(250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)

 

"So, I came from a small hamlet. There was a vote a while back that my folks weren't too happy about. Feeling a little let down, and a bunch of others left for the Spire, hoping for better opportunities! On the way, our caravan got attacked by a group of Greatlings while we were playing Flabber-Fae-- man, I love that game ..."

The overly enthusiastic fey-touched creature rocks in their seat, recounting a story as if it were a birthday or celebration, rather than a traumatic event from their travels. They bounce and ramble, changing topics every so often and pointing out random things, stuttering over themselves, and when they get to the point of the story, it is spat out, lightning fast.

"We had some Feyguard with us, but they were outnumbered. They fought and fought. I didn't see the outcome of the battle, but I was able to slip away! The fun memories of my friends and our little trip kept my feet moving. I don't remember how long I walked, but I kind of was day dreaming and now I'm here!"

They finish their story with a shark-toothed smile, folding their hands over their lap to try and still their constant fidgeting, their sharp ears fluttering as they look back to the stranger at full attention, hoping they retained at least a fraction of their story even if they were speaking at a mile per minute.

Character Name: Nieve

Character Race:  Fey-Touched, Falstoner 

Character Age: 22

 Brief Physical Description: solid red eyes, fey touched with feathers, silver hair (dyed different colors), 4'0 
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Image of Skin and Figura Model: I don't have one yet.

Hello! My name is Blinx and I'll be handling your whitelist application. As Discord media links tend to expire within a day when used outside of Discord itself, I've re-uploaded the image you provided for Nieve's appearance for archival purposes.

First, while the details like Flabber-Fae and the Feyguard are excellent inclusions for lore terms, I'd like a bit more detail regarding some of the terms used in the application. This could be on Nieve's old life in Fallstone, stories about Fables or other world details Nieve heard in their travels, or even creatures they've seen from the Bestiary. Secondly, while Greatling raids used to be common, it's noted on both the Fallstone geography and Falstoner culture pages that the Greatlings of the mountains and the Falstoners are often on good enough terms to trade between each other or even experience some linguistic exchange. Raiding parties from there were more common in the past, and very uncommon nowadays.

Next! Fey-Touched are generally restricted to relatively human skintones and hair colours, meaning that as-is Nieve cannot have grey hair or white skin. However, as Arsa Sidhe (elves) can, you're welcome to make Nieve half Arsa-Sidhe and half Fey-Touched if you'd like their skin to be white and their hair to be white or grey. Given only humans have rounded ears, everything would be compliant if you'd like to take that route! Just be aware that hair dye is somewhat limited in-world to real materials used historically or otherwise unique to our lore, so most shades achievable either need to be slight or have another specified source.

Additionally, I'd ask what colour you intend to make Nieve's feathers, and whether "shark-toothed" is a creative descriptor or if Nieve's teeth are meant to be generally pointy.

Please let me know when you'd like me to take another look by leaving a reply here so I'll be notified!

Hello! A reminder that further review on your application is pending until revisions are made in line with the feedback above -- otherwise, I'll have to deny the application for inactivity.

Due to inactivity during the review process, I'll be denying this application. If you'd still like to whitelist, you can re-apply at any time -- just take into account the feedback provided here should you choose to do so!