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Approved _ramiro_ whitelist application [Approved - Moony]
Started by ramiro

OOC

Minecraft Username: _ramiro_

 

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes (turned 18 today)

 

Have you read the rules? (Link): yes

 

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?:

 

— from a comment on a YT video about abandoned minecraft servers (HollowWorld caught my attention so i found a comment on that video that said there was a predecessor of it(avalore) )

 

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username:

 

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

 

i don't have much to talk about me, im ramiro, i like to play games and i love RPG

 

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

 

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

 

“Nervous?”

 

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

 

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

 

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

 

How do you respond (in character)? (250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)


—  “I have come from Amafell in search of an adventure, even though I want to be a mage I still like a good exploration.

But what I'm mostly looking for is uncovering the mystery behind the Aedall. Ever since I was a little kid I’ve been captivated by tales about the Reach and how its old inhabitants vanished. A tale my father used to tell me.

And the Spire, A monument they built in legacy of their true ancestry. It all intrigued me so much, it’s magical for me, a culture that vanished from thin air. I've read a couple books about them. and I want to know more about it. It has encouraged me to explore and maybe I can discover something no one else did, who knows..”

Frey leans back, looking up, thinking about something, he goes back and ask the woman:

“Do you believe in apparitions?”

The woman, a bit surprised, replies

“Why do you ask, dear?”

Frey answers:

—  “There is a story I would like to share, once while simply walking at night, I hear a distant cry coming from a house far from the others, a house long abandoned, my curiosity made me go to the window to have a peek inside, there i saw it, a tall humanoid figure with a cloak, looks like its made of smoke, and glowing eyes, when it suddenly wailed at me, it started to approach once i couldn't move from the fear, luckily a nearby guard noticed and came to help me, he pushed me back and told me to get away, I pull myself together and started to run as far as i could, hearing the guard scream, I couldn't help but cry and keep running, he sacrificed himself to save me..”

Character Name: Frey Wandarr

 

Character Race: Fey-Touched (mountain heritage)

 

Character Age: 18 (june 6 1623 /// greenrain 14 1623)

 

 Brief Physical Description: male, 5'9, not bulky but has some definition, with pale gray skin, fully golden eyes, long black hair with a tiny ponytail and light blue'ish feathers on both arms (legs too but its covered by the pants)

Image of Skin and Figura Model:

                     



                                             ramiro

Hey Ramiro, I'll be handling your application. 

You're on the right track, but there are a few changes that need to be made to keep everything in the right area before I can continue processing your application:

1) The skin for a Fey-Touched cannot be gray/grey. It can range from a pale rosy colour to a deep brown. Maybe you could go for a Half-Fey Touched and Half-Greatling if you're set on that skintone?

2) I noticed a few grammatical errors in your writing, such as lowercase "i's" that I'd like to see you do a pass over on. 

After that, or if you have any questions, you can comment here or reach out to me through Avalore's Discord and I'll take a look at the changes!

 

google docs probably tried to correct some words, it was doing that all the time, i tried to fix everything i saw, about the skin tone, its alright, i'll prolly go something in a more pink tone


edit: if you could tell me where are those grammar mistakes, i'd appreciate it
edit 2: also, im not sure, but i think i asked whether the skin tone was ok or not and they said yes (tho i will get it fixed and edit the application)

                     



                                             ramiro

- Welcome! -

Your whitelist application is approved. The server runs on 1.20.4 and you can connect using the IP: mc.avalore.net.

Here's our Mechanics page for an overview on how the system works, and some Guides on how our main in-game plugins can be used. This Guide in particular may help to find your way into RP involvement!

Consider creating a profile for your character in the Character Profiles section of the forums!

If you have any questions feel free to reach out to me or another member of our Community team either on the forums or through our Discord.

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