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Denied Some_Dunkus's Application [Denied - Tidepod]
Started by Some_Dunkus

Minecraft Username: Some_Dunkus

Are you at least 18 years old?: Yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): Yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: Through the Minecraft Servers website

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username:

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)

"My family actually grew up in the Reach. They were both born from this land, I am on my way to The Spire, to find anyone who knows about any Falstoner Caravans so that I may join them and live among them. I also hope to find out more about my family because they died in a horrible accident when I was super young so I had to grow up on my own. They actually grew up where the spire is now. They were here in the reach before the Spire was a town. They were arund during Sanguifleur. They have books on all their adventures through that historical event." He looks at you with his solid sunset orange eyes with his light pale skin covered in green vine like coming from his ankles moving up his legs toward his waist, bits of green pop out of his shorts. As well as vine like coming from his wrists and covering parts of his arms toward his chest, bits of green showing through his vest. "I am just looking to restart my life by joining the Falstoners, I have always been fascinated with how they live. I hope we can travel to a whole bunch of places like the midlands, I love how much foliage and moisture there is. I Hope to feel at home there. I also hope to travel to Albern Crossing, I know it's a small space with just a bridge, but I love the sound of water under a bridge, it's amazing. It’s like the soothing sound of rice running through a tube, only some people can hear it if they listen close enough with their eyes closed." He smiles and shakes nervously as he adjusts in his seat. “I also did some reading about the The Great Disappearance, and how the Aedall just vanished, I want to see if I can find any traces of that group and see where they "vanished" off to. Maybe there is someone who might know something or maybe about about the time of 1590 A.C." He starts ranting on about that event.



 Usage of AI to generate, modify or translate the writing on your application will result in denial of your whitelist. There will be no chance to re-apply afterwards.

Character Name: Jordan Thistle

Character Race: Fey-Touched

Character Age: 46

 Brief Physical Description: sunset orange eyes, with  light brown hair, and pointy ears

Image of Skin and Figura Model:

Hey! Thank you for applying, you're almost set to join but we'd just like to see some tweaks in the In-Character section. Some of the lore references are a bit lacking so we'd like to see something more substantial. Feel free to ping me or ask other Mentors for any clarification in the whitelist-help channel!

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Alright I added some more information about an event. 

Sorry if it wasn't clear, we're not looking for just name-drops and surface level descriptions. The references should reflect some familiarity with the lore, for example tying in the region's distinct traits to the character and/or their story. 

I am assuming you wanted my character to some how be tired to the lore or have it related to him so I had his parents grow up in the reach before they left to have my character. Sorry if that is not what you want but I thought my character never visited the reach or anything about it so idk why he'd have any lore tired to him or anything. 

Unfortunately I have to deny this application because the lore references are simply not in-depth enough. Feel free to ask questions in the discord, and reapply after taking the time to familiarize yourself more with Avalore's setting and integrate it in your submission.