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Denied Some_Dunkus's Final Application - [Denied - Spiritscribe]
Started by Some_Dunkus

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Minecraft Username: Some_Dunkus

Are you at least 18 years old?: Yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): Yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: Minecraft servers website

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username:

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)

He looks at her sternly; however, realizing he is addressing an elder, he immediately softens his gaze. “Oh, me? I am on my way to join the Blades of Bastion. I have heard they are the last of their clan, and that is sad to hear. I have grown up my whole life admiring them and hearing stories of all the help they have provided to this land over time. I am here to give back by helping them rebuild, and to hopefully join them in aiding any clan in need. I have a fondness for helping in any way I can.” He raises his fist. “For I am Revar, the Altruist!” He lowers his fist, looking at the old lady again. “Can I tell you something? I was born half-Greatling and half-Fey-touched. My family isn’t a huge deal, but I want to make a name for myself—and the first step to doing that is by choosing my own name. I’m using this name instead of my birth name because I’m in a new area. Not because my real name has any problems tied to it,” he gestures his hands upward, “it just isn’t a name worth mentioning. I want my name to be something people hear and feel hope and courage. I want nothing out of this but the joy of acting out of the kindness of my heart.” He smiles at the old lady, leaning toward her gently. “I think it may help my cause that I am both Greatling and Fey-touched, just like the Firebornes. I only hope I have magical abilities like many Fey-touched do. I have my horns, so who knows? I just hope I don’t get too scorched in the Ashlands.” He chuckles. “That is a joke. I have thick skin; it won’t affect me until it burns me! I have always been fond of Fireborne culture. Being mixed-race, I think I might feel at home among them. I hope to start a family, make a name for myself, have epic adventures, and find amazing gear.” He looks off into the distance. “This is the start of a new life. The life of Revar, the Altruist!”
Usage of AI to generate, modify or translate the writing on your application will result in denial of your whitelist. There will be no chance to re-apply afterwards.

Character Name: Revar, The Altruist

Character Race: Fey-Touched/Greatling

Character Age: 76

 Brief Physical Description: Solid Orange eyes, horns coming out of the temples going toward the front of his face spiraling. Small beard no hair on his head. Cloth covering his mouth and facial hair. Green cloak with grey vest underneath. Shorts and leather boots. 

Image of Skin and Figura Model:

Hello Some_Dunkus.

I regret to inform you that we're going to have to deny your application for the following reasons:

  • You have once again misunderstood the prompt and the lore. The Blades of Bastion are in the Ashlands, which is very, very far North in our world, not in the Southern Reach. The Ashlands and the Southern Reach are on near opposite sides of the world.
  • Your other two lore references are simply just a physical description of your character, which are not sufficient enough lore references.
  • Your very sudden and extreme improvement in writing and the correct use of advanced punctuation indicates some usage of AI to bolster your writing, which is strictly prohibited.
  • Lastly, your skin is not compliant for a Fey-Touched Greatling.

As this is your third attempt, any further applications will not be considered. You will be immediately denied.