OOC
Minecraft Username: Killerthe24th

Are you at least 18 years old?: yep 19

Have you read the rules?: yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: I found it in redit

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: N/A

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): Hello I am Nikitas, I am 19 and my birthday is at 7 of august. I like drawing, hearing music and video games, more preference on strategy games. I love history and I am relatively new to RP so that is all

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In-Character
Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)? (250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)
"Well, not sure really, but this could as well be the reason why I have ended up here. I wish to find out why I am here, why I left my family and familiar lands to find myself here." *He chuckles and leans his head up a bit, looking at the old wagon's roof that they spent a few days, hours. Who knows how much traveling on.*

"And if you do not mind me asking, what were your familiar lands?" *She says with practiced interest, like she has asked hundreds of times before.*

"I was born in the Mori province, under the control of the Great Clan Moon. I lived for a while in Pyo port. A place where one can easily find something to do between the constantly trafficked harbor or the bustling markets. Never got bored, I'll tell you that much." *he says with a chuckle before looking back at the elderly woman*

*A curious expression can easily be seen in her eyes while she pretends to think for a moment. "Isn't the Mori province quite far away from here? Why come all the way here to find your reasoning?"

*He lets out a small and quiet sigh, closing his eyes slightly while remembering fragments of his past. "I simply felt like it wasn't the place for me, so when I grew up I set out to more open seas. I ended up finding people both like me and far more different than my imaginations could prepare me for."

"So any interesting places you have visited?"

"Well, when I left, I made my way to the port Aylma'aan, in the Mist Isles. It had quite the unique people, with all its diversity of races and customs, but still managed to retain a happy and welcoming atmosphere. Quite recently, I heard from Valiant traders about the Southern Reach, a place with endless possibilities and opportunities. So I decided to test my luck, but I guess on this one you can relate as well." *He says, looking at the elderly woman, as if expecting a response.*


*she simply nods*

"Yeah, so to summarize it up, I reached the midlands, worked a bit to make enough for the trip and then set off on my way to the spire. But yeah, sorry for mumbling to myself, I simply am here to find a place I can truly call my own. How about you? Why did you decide to come to the reach?"

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Character Name: Lama Lamikton

Character Race: Human

Character Age: 26

 Brief Physical Description: He is a 1.84 meters, thin physique, blue eyes, wearing blue and white merchant clothing.

Image of Skin and Figura Model:

Hello! My name is Blinx, and I'll be handling your whitelist application.

Lama's appearance and the lore incorporated are relatively well-done. However, most of the reply is a single paragraph with one line of narration, and dialogue which isn't in dialogue tags (ex. She said, "Hello there!"). I'd like to see the application revised to include a little more narration to break up the dialogue as well as include those tags, as our in-game plugin makes use of them. You're still welcome to put narration in *asterisks* if you'd like, though! 

If you could leave a reply here when you've made the requested edits, we can proceed with the review process. 

Bliinx:

Hello! My name is Blinx, and I'll be handling your whitelist application.

Lama's appearance and the lore incorporated are relatively well-done. However, most of the reply is a single paragraph with one line of narration, and dialogue which isn't in dialogue tags (ex. She said, "Hello there!"). I'd like to see the application revised to include a little more narration to break up the dialogue as well as include those tags, as our in-game plugin makes use of them. You're still welcome to put narration in *asterisks* if you'd like, though! 

If you could leave a reply here when you've made the requested edits, we can proceed with the review process. 

Hello! Apologies for the delay.

The addition of narration is good. However, in the edit, I've noticed a good number of grammatical errors including typos ("qurius", "handrets", etc) and two run-on sentences:

1. "I was born in the Mori province, under the control of  the Great Clan Moon, and lived for a while in the Pyo port, a place where one can easily find something to do between the constantly trafficked harbor or bustling markets, never got bored, I'll tell you that much."

2. "Well, when I left I made my way to the port Aylma'aan, in the Mist Isles, it had quite the unique people, with all its diversity in races and customs, but still managed to retain a happy and welcoming atmosphere, despite everyones diferences."

I'd ask you look back over the application and make some grammatical corrections to these sections. While a typo or error here and there is fine, the frequency with which they appear in the in-character section can sometimes make it difficult to read. Namely, I'd ask the run-on sentences be re-phrased to use fewer commas. If you can reply here when you're done so I can review the changes, that should be it before I can approve the application.

Ok, I think I got it fixed. no worries about the delay, hope everything has been alright in your end. thank you for reading through my application.

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