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Approved Razgriz's Whitelist Application [Approved - Bliinx]
Started by Razgriz

Minecraft Username: Zirgzari

Are you at least 18 years old?: Yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): Yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: Azur

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: A_Z_U_R

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): 

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)(250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?) 

 

The greatling's slitted gaze shifted to the elderly woman. "Duty." He responded simply. "As well as paying an old friend a visit, I suppose. Us black-bloods have to stick together after all." He chuckled, a low rumbling sound, and raised a hand to shade his view as he looked out over the plains. He seemed to be searching the horizon for something in the direction they came from. "The wall was quite impressive. I am sure it has many stories to tell." A smile touched his lips. "Walls are beautiful things. Symbols of resilience, of a certain.. will to survive. One can tell much about a people from the wall that shelters those that live within it." He turned back to the woman. "Wouldn't you agree?" 

He didn't wait for an answer. Rather, he stood slowly and hopped off of the wagon, beginning to walk alongside before continuing to speak.

"My people have a saying: 'The Dragon weighs not your wounds, but how often you stood despite them." He paused, seeming to give a brief moment for the words to take hold. "My people have many sayings, I suppose, but this one I carry with me." His gaze seemed to harden as he looked forward. As if suddenly focusing on what he has deemed a very important task. A hand drifted to a ruby pendant that hung loosely at his belt. "I come here because it is my duty to show others why those words are so important. To teach." 

Finally the giant fell silent long enough to give the woman a chance to respond. 

 

Usage of AI to generate, modify or translate the writing on your application will result in denial of your whitelist. There will be no chance to re-apply afterwards.

Character Name: Sylas Mathogan

Character Race: Greatling (Fireborne)

Character Age: 34

 Brief Physical Description: A hulking figure standing at 8'3 and built like a modern strongman, Sylas has golden yellow slitted eyes and pale skin. He has medium length black hair and a short beard. A massive scar stretches from one shoulder to the opposite side of his lower torso.

Image of Skin and Figura Model: 

Hello! My name is Blinx, and I'll be handling your whitelist application.

Overall, the application is solid. I have a few pieces of feedback before I can approve it, but nothing that should require substantial re-writes:

  • As the premise for the reply section references the wagon passing through "The rolling plains of the Southern Reach [...]", Sylas would've already passed the Wall separating the Midlands and Reach. The geography included is otherwise correct--I'd just ask this line be revised to reflect that he would've already passed it to get into the Reach: "I also hear that there is quite the wall here to be seen."
  • You're correct! Greatlings generally do not have red or ginger hair. Fey-Touched (half and not) can have real-life ginger and shades of scarlet and crimson, but given Sylas's eyes seem to be a prominent part of his design it may be easiest to give him black hair. If you'd like to do red, though, you're welcome to review the Fey-Touched and Half-Races pages to make him a half-race. Whatever you decide, just attach an image to either the original or a new reply so I can see and approve the design.

Review the feedback provided whenever you can, and I'll get back to you once I see a reply in the thread.

 

I have adjusted the line and description. I will have the hair color on the skin adjusted before I log in if I get approved! 

~ [ Welcome! ] ~

Your whitelist application has been accepted! The server is currently running on Minecraft version 1.20.4, and can be joined by connecting with the IP: mc.avalore.net.

Basic server plugin, modpack, and Figura information can be found under the Guides section of the Forum (although the modpack is optional). There's also an excellent write-up by community member Pyrias which is designed to help newcomers get started and connected, readable here.

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