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Denied Shez Novellark whitelist application [Denied - Bliinx]
Started by bomsanchu

Minecraft Username: bomsanchu 

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes i am 27 years old 

Have you read the rules? (Link)
 
(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: i was searching for a roleplaying server that i could be a part of 
 
(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: no 

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): my name is Eden i play and create ttrpgs including complete new systems for tabletop rpg's. none are published so i don't have a portfolio yet. I unfortunately deleted most of my world from back in the day but i specialize in building huge things and am mostly good at grinding for resources in minecraft but my style is mostly based on medieval german houses with the wood and white walls and fantasy like lotr and harry potter 

 

 

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In-Character 

Read the following prompt: 

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands. 

“Nervous?” 

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes. 

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in. 

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?” 

How do you respond (in character)? “Ow dear me, i must have died as i see an angel before me, as you can see i am a fashion designer and came to spread my love for fashion in these lands” shez points to his horribly clashing clothes, bright and just too much” but you definitely must have heard about me, the great Shez Novellark the greatest writer and poet in the land(not really). But more important what is your name my dear angel. 
 
“well dear i am off now heard there was a group of valkians coming to the harbour, maybe they have some stories that i could use in my repertoire and they must hear the stories of my heroics and the beasts i have slain, have a nice day dear tah-tah" 
 
Shez walks of to the harbor to meet the valkians having traded and worked with them for years always wanting to know the stories of their travels, his walk is gracious and confident, his soles not making a sound on the pavement as he strolls towards the harbor, he sees men he has seen before and some he didnt emmediately dsitracting the men with stories, tall-tales and horrible poetry getting a couple coins for his entertainment, the men see him as a Jester while he himself sees it as him being a wonderful entertainer. 
 
the men of the sea come back to land, the valkians and their famous brand, do they come here for just some fun or are they all just on the run, the valkians, the valkians merchants of the world, they come to here and are better then a turd”  

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Character Name: Shez Novellark 

Character Race: Arsa Sidhe 

Character Age: around 25 

 Brief Physical Description: pinkish skin, colorful clothing and bright yellow eyes with orange streaks and long blueish black hair 

Image of Skin and Figura Model: 

This application has been reviewed, and at this time, is denied. The reply section of the application displays a number of grammatical errors including frequent usage of run-on sentences, missing dialogue tags (") as well as general misunderstanding about our world and lore. We have a world map, including links to relevant lore pages! The Valkians live in the Valkian Realm within the Midlands, and the prompt provided places Shez within the Southern Reach (which is far south of there). The mentions of the Valkians and a 'harbour' within the Reach seem somewhat misplaced, as a result, and creates a very confusing sense of place about where Shez actually is.

You're welcome to re-apply at any time. Should you choose to, keep in mind the feedback provided here and the prompt itself when writing a reply!

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