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Denied Whitelist application [Denied - Moony]
Started by Shooshim

OOC

Minecraft Username: Shooshim

Are you at least 18 years old?: Yeppers (19)

Have you read the rules? (Link): Yes

(Optional) Were you referred by someone? If so, who:

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)? (150 words minimum - please make sure to include some references to our lore in your response!)

 

—“Oh! Hello there ma’am. Why have I come to the reach? Simple. I’m a Valkyian through and through. My whole life I’ve been traveling, and during my time traveling I’ve grown absolutely fascinated with the world around me.”

She pauses for a moment, recalling old fond memories.

“Come to think of it, my fascination probably all started when I was just a babe. See, my mother was an explorer and would tell me all about her grand adventures.” “Dressed up for my infant mind no doubt.” She added “Although to me they were more than just stories. They were real, and sometime down the line after I had grown up some, I decided that exploring and documenting my adventures would be my future.”

“Now as for why I’m heading to The Spire? I seek to study it, find out where it came from, who built it, and what its purpose is.”

As she speaks she gestures with her hands wildly as if they would help her story better. She boasts an unmistakable twinkle of dedication in her eye. Before she stops suddenly.

“Ah, but look at me rambling. I haven’t even introduced myself yet. I’m Lenora Wormwood, and you are?”

 

 

Character Name: Lenora Wormwood

Character Race: Human

Character Age: 28

Brief Physical Description: A slender woman about 5,7 in height with deep blue eyes framed by the widest spectacles you ever did see. A short bob of dark brunette hair rests upon her head.

Hi Shooshim, your application is looking good! I would however request that you:
1. Incorporate a more specific reference to Avalore's lore writing and setting into your character's backstory. This is to ensure players have viewed and understand some of our unique lore as a medieval fantasy server. You can see our lore compendium here.

2. I would encourage you to think on more concrete motivations and traits to your character beyond wishing to study the Spire; while it is an interesting fixture of our setting, it does not provide much information on your character's personality traits, goals, or motivations.

Please reply to this thread when these updates have been made and I will take another look. Thanks!


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Unfortunately I'm going to decline this application based on inactivity. Please feel free to reapply in the future when you have time and if you are still interested in being part of Avalore.