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Denied Whitelist Application [Denied - Dinomono]
Started by Edris_Quill

OOC

Minecraft Username: Neighte

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): yes

(Optional) Were you referred by someone? If so, who:

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins):

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)? (150 words minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)

Garand would let out a bit of a yawn, instinctively covering his mouth as he did so, “Well mydame, as you can plainly see, I am a Valk, and like most Valks I come from a long line of merchants and brewers. When I heard about what happened to the Aedall in the Southern Reach, I figured ‘well, why not?’ and decided to journey down south.” 

 

What the tinkerman left out was that he was primarily interested in Aedall artifacts and the Southern Reach’s various Fables for his journal. That, and he was getting a bit tired of life in Mariza and wanted some excitement, and what better way to do that than to venture off past the Wall which his people always told of a troublesome folk that merely piqued his curiosity further.

 

He’d muse on this briefly, before looking back toward the old woman, “But enough about me, what about you? Why have YOU come on this journey of ours?”

Character Name: Garand Thorn

Character Race: Nua Sidhe (Human)

Character Age: 32

Brief Physical Description

Garand is a sprightly young man, sporting a not-so-modest height of 6’3”. His face could be described as conventionally attractive. His skin is slightly pale, and his head sports a well-kept mass of brown, which contrasts with his blue eyes. 

Hello, I'm Dinomono and I will be reviewing your application. I will also apologise for it having taken this long to be picked up.

You're on the right track, mentioning such things as Mariza, the Aedall and Fables. But I would ask that these mentions become more developed, and tied into Garand's interests, for example: What does Garand find of interest in Fables, or in the Aedall? who are the 'troublesome folk' his people have told him about that reside in the Southern Reach, have they told him anything else about this land?

Going more in depth into the lore terms in the text and tying them to your character, whether they're those of these examples or not, is something I would need before continuing. Once this has been updated, please relpy to this thread.

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- Signed by Moogy

Your application has been denied due to inactivity, feel free to reapply in the future.

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- Signed by Moogy