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Approved Aeloria's Application [Approved - Dinomono]
Started by jojothedodo

OOC

Minecraft Username: jordannnn03

Are you at least 18 years old?: yes

Have you read the rules? (Link): yes

(Optional) How did you hear about Avalore?: minecraft server website

(Max. 1) Were you referred by someone? If so, please provide their in-game username: no

(Optional) Introduce yourself if you’d like, as well as any creations you want to share (e.g. art, builds, skins): I'm Jordan and this would be my first rp server. I love fantasy games and stories and thought this would be the perfect first experience. I really hope my back story and character description isn't too bad.

In-Character

Read the following prompt:

The rhythmic lull of hoofbeats are a marching drum to the small group of pioneers and variety of folk you have found yourself amongst, packed into a wobbling wagon. The rolling plains of the Southern Reach and a clear sky stretch out all around you, the buzz of excited chatter a dull wash in your ears as your mind strays to your former life and what has led you here to new lands.

“Nervous?”

You blink, returning to the present moment. A kindly older woman sat near you is smiling warmly with a crinkle to her eyes.

“I can tell it’s your first time. Still remember mine,” she flashes a grin and leans in.

“Tell me my dear, why have you come to the Reach?”

How do you respond (in character)(250 word minimum - please make sure to include at least three references to our lore in your response, with two coming from different pages in the Compendium.  Two of the three selected should also be in-depth, avoid simply name-dropping lore terms. Tie the terms into your character's backstory. Why are they important to them?)

Aeloria considers ignoring her and to continue of thinking about what history she'll find in a new home but ultimately, she decided not to be rude to her fellow travelers.  

"I'm not nervous but anxious. I come from a smaller village surrounding The Great Clan Moon in southwest Ko'ram, I have human father and Arsa Sidhe mother." Aeloria takes a deep breath, she hasn't told anyone besides her little brother why she was coming to the Southern Reach. The older woman is giving her a reassuring smile and reassuring it's okay to continue. "My parents gave me and my brother the best life they could in a smaller, struggling village outside the main city; my father was killed when another great clan tried to attack ours when I was 15. It was hard after that, but my mother used her talents in dress making to provide for us. I was able to train as a Kamori warrior, and my brother is becoming a well-respected merchant. I decided with him taking care of my mo-" 

The older woman stops Aeloria, " Why is a Kamori warrior traveling, I thought y'all never traveled." 

Aeloria rolls her eyes but keeps her patience, "As I was saying, with my mother and brother doing fine I decided I had more purpose than that little village. I wanted to discover the mysteries of my ancestors, after all the Aedall prized themselves in being the last true successors of our ancestors. Most Arsa Sidhe don't travel without reason, but I need to know my history and maybe even establishes new beginnings."  

The older woman blinks, opens her mouth and closes it. "I um... Um... really hope you find your answers." Aeloria knows that everyone believes the Aedall's culture and academic knowledge are lost to time, but she knows you can't destroy all information.... 

Character Name: Aeloria Elrond

Character Race: human/Arsa Sidhe

Character Age: 22

Brief Physical Description: Aeloria has human traits such as golden olive skin and rounded ears. She inherited rich purple eyes, knee length silver hair that she wears in 2 dutch braids, and a slim body build with thin skin from her Arsa Sidhe heritage. She wears purple fighting leathers.  

Hello! I'm Dinomono and I'll be reviewing this application, so far you're on the right track, but certain aspects of it are keeping me from approving it just yet:

  • Your character cannot form part of the Great Clans, they can belong to another one that serves under them and lives in their territory however, as Ko'ram is full of more minor clans.
  • The Aedall weren't ancestors to Korami, they were contemporary to them, and are not quite so ancient, their disappearance happening only 51 years before Avalore's present. They do share history in being what cultures remained from the Ancients' Empire after their collapse, 1641 years before the present, which is how your character could link these two peoples instead to remain lore-appropriate.

Once changes have been made, please respond to this thread so I'm notified and can continue reviewing!

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- Signed by Moogy

I think I understood what you mean I hope I'm not wasting anymore of your time

- Welcome! -

Your whitelist application is approved. The server runs on 1.20.4 and you can connect using the IP: mc.avalore.net.

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If you have any questions feel free to reach out to me or another member of our Community team either on the forums or through our Discord.

(You're all good, don't worry! This isn't any kind of waste of time, plenty of whitelists have required a bit of editing to get approved before, welcome to Avalore!)

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- Signed by Moogy